Well I suppose I'll have to apologise for not reading this earlier, but after reading the rough version I felt it would just be like re-reading it for the sole purpose of leaving a small review.

Small. Hah. It's interesting, taking the perspective of those close to the shooter. It's usually from the POV of the shooter or the victims. Now, this is just me, but I'm not entirely all for the idea of a shooting story. It's such a recurrent matter that hearing about them just makes me ill.

But thats nothing against the story. It was well written, but you have to watch tiny punctuation errors. A small hint, after an elipse, ('...') it's considered another sentence. Therefore you have to capitalize the following word. No, I'm not trying to nag, just doing my job.

Anyways, good luck on future installments, and such.

i loved it.
keep it up!
-layla-

Though it did start somewhat rough, it was quite the well written prologue setting up for quite a storyline. A very serious topic indeed that has arisen recently over the past year or so, and I'd like to see where you go with this.

My only complaint is the pace of the prologue, it seemed to jump from the funeral to the hospital quite quickly for my tastes. But other than that I enjoyed how this was written.

I hadn't expected it to be Chad's brother who had been the shooter when you vaguely told me about the story on msn. Anywho, best of luck on the story and I hope you portray the topic to the best of your abilities because of its seriousness.