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| Lyra Pocaterra 2008-04-06 ch 1, | Wow, this has to be one of my favourite poems... I love the way you portray her sadness and lonelyness, and i love your idea of a "song without words just tears". It would be even better if it had a more distinctive rythim but then it might lose some of its beautiful images and ideas. Beautiful poem. Keep the good work up, Lyra x |
| sin olvido 2007-05-19 ch 1, | This is a great poem that I immensely enjoyed reading, but it *would* be nice to see some structure here -- as in, grammatical divisions! I'm not a punctuation stickler, but it would be a lot easier to read the poem with stanzas or at least a comma or fullstop every now and then. Great poem, nevertheless! ~Cristina :) |