Reviews for Wednesday's Child

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anymysteryleft 2008-06-19 ch 4,	abuseThis was where I began to get a little bit confused. The first segment sets up the motive, but the next segment involving Parker seemed a tad disjointed and out of place. I liked the idea of showing Parker's view (perhaps a representative of the common mindset of the people in Ablution), but it felt a bit abrupt and short, and I wished it had expanded a bit more. It directly talks about what I consider to be one of the central themes of this story (the importance of the past), and it deserves more attention, I think.
anymysteryleft 2008-06-19 ch 3,	abuseBy far my favorite chapter of the story. The imagery of the Hummingbird House is pictured clearly, and re-reading this chapter after finishing the whole story explains the reason why Gideon feels so comforted and calm in this house. Does the mention of Native American culture mean that the story is set in the North American continent? The house was also highly reminiscent of the antique store in Nineteeneightyfour. Perhaps it was an inspiration? In any case, I don't see anything that needs improvement. Good work.
anymysteryleft 2008-06-19 ch 2,	abuseVery creative use of the seven days and I liked your assigning of the identification for each day. Good pacing of the plot. I'm a bit curious, though, as to why you chose "Wednesday's Child" as the title since Gideon is the main focus of the story, not Mara.
anymysteryleft 2008-06-19 ch 1,	abuseSolid. The first segment definitely grabs the reader's attention, and I think it lays out the foundation of the story well.
WildRoseThorn 2008-05-19 ch 7,	abuse"You're so blinkin happy all the rime!!" So funny!
Aleksy The Flying Onion 2008-04-18 ch 2,	abuseWow, the first bit of this story is like a bad drug trip. haha I love how you describe things. Its fluid and lucid, and I really feel like I'm in his head at parts. I can't get enough of the whole prophecy aspect. Is the 'days of the week' a really nursery rhyme? I've never heard it before--just curious. The only thing I'd point out is that the whole scenario seems...unbelievable? How would a young boy tug an unconscious grown man out of a city that abhors the outside? Hmm. strokes chin Not a big deal, really. I can suspend belief to enjoy this story. I'm just saying that other people might not. Anyway, great chapter! :D
Aleksy The Flying Onion 2008-04-18 ch 1,	abuseSorry I haven't been able to review until now. I started reading this story and got hooked pretty quickly. Anyway, here's what I thought! I LOVE IT! The whole things is fresh and interesting. You have really tight sentences structure, spelling, and great descriptions. The character's names are awesome; I've always been a fan of Gideon. It also seems like you have a completly new world going on here. I was a little overwhelmed by all of the foreign terminology, but I'm sure as the story progresses that things will level out. Anyway, great job so far! On to chappy two! :D
WildRoseThorn 2008-04-18 ch 6,	abuseThis chapter is really sad. But I'm excited to know where the relationship between Mara and Gideon is going to go.
WildRoseThorn 2008-04-15 ch 5,	abuseI love your descriptions. They're so vivid! And this story is amazing. Update soon, please!
WildRoseThorn 2008-04-05 ch 4,	abuseAH! Dang it, a cliffhanger. Update soon, please!
WildRoseThorn 2008-04-05 ch 3,	abuseThis chapter was really sad. Now I feel bad for Gideon. And, by the way, I love how you use that song in this story.
WildRoseThorn 2008-04-05 ch 2,	abuseI feel so bad for Mara. Me, full of grace? Not so much. Apparently that nursery rhyme doesn't apply to me. :)
WildRoseThorn 2008-04-05 ch 1,	abuseWow. This is really intriguing. I love these futuristic stories.
meowza 2008-03-22 ch 2,	abuseokay. this is really ** me off haha. i'm sorry about doing this in your story. =X yournewcancer23 at aol dot com there.
meowza 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abuseeek! thank you for your comments, i really appreciate it. i'll most likely take most of your C&C because i really liked how you reworded the sentences, etc. i tried to message you my email, but i guess it didn't work? anyway, i was wondering if you could C&C chapter two and three also? email:

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