aw how sweet

Love the story. I say she should defenetly stay with ronnie

This is great! I can't find anything that is bothering me (which is good). I love your imagery - I can perfectly imagine what Roxy looks like. This story sounds like it will be very interesting :]

I think there should be a show down between Ronnie and Alexander to see who gets the girl, but of course, Ronnie should naturally get the girl. ;)

i really like reading about stuff like this cuz its always fun to see how each author writes the character of the girl. i would probably have acted the same way as roxanne. i think that's what has me hooked. ronnie seems kinda creepy calling her sweetheart and all... i mean he's only known for a day and why would he be all happy about it?

-SWEM

Ronnie. Though, I wouldnt mind Alexander making Ronnie a little more jealous. Great story!

hey hey

it is me and i am reviewing your wonderful story as per your request

i will get you the things for you to type as soon as possible

i love your story keep up the good work

hehe get her together with Ronnie!

why because that is so cliche and i love it
or not it really is your decision is this review long enough for you?

i could probably make it longer.

oh i forgot i actually have to go do something - i'll review again later

so far i really like this and i am intrigued to see this story develop further!

Rather than doing the two pov's you might want to tell this in 3rd person omniscient. The reader tends to get bored reading the same scene twice. The story idea is a good one though.

wow this seems to be a very intersting story i can't wait to read more of it

This story is great so far. I was confused at first but it is all making sense. Please tell your friend to write more quickly. It is definitely something I would like to finish.