Myspace sucks your soul ever so slowly.

that is all.

ShookieDoesntKnow

Formerly, ShookieInLove

Formerly before that, ShookieSmilesSweetly

Formerly before even that, Unknown

ha ha ha. lol. The rhyming scheme...corny, but it made sense. Which made me want to read more. And seriously, it was hilarious, making a serious subject into a funny rap sorta thing. It reminds me of what I tried to do in ninth grade: I had to make a geography rap about Egypt and it came out super corny. At least yours was better. lol. Funny schtick.

Hehe...cool me laugh for main thing,it tells you what myspaces does to us..haha..anyways,very would've thought of it as a poem,though.

very good but it should be titled honestly not humor.

lol... very funny.

interesting, though i think you could have used more description/metaphors to make this piece flow better. keep at it.

wow, nice...finally someone put how i feel about myspace into writing...

i do believe it belongs in the humor section though, made me laugh

i don't think it really belongs in the humor section no affence. but i do think people should read it think about the consequences of myspace. good work.

*laughs* Still love this from when you read it to me! Pictured it in a different format, but that doesn't really affect it-the important thing is the message getting across! *high five* Love it.

Wolfie

p.s. I asked my mom about Tuesday, and she responded with a fervent 'No.' Dunno why, but I would guess it would have something to do with my brother...we have to help him go to the bathroom now...*retches* Stupid broken arm... _ I'd call ya, but it took me forever to finally get online and I am NOT jeopardizing that!

This is a terribly amusing poem. And by 'terribly', I mean terribly. It's really bad, but true and because of that, it's ok. I don't know how to explain it, but it's true.

"And soon your raped, / By a forty year old man!" This is probably the best line of the whole damn thing.

However, I have a serious problem with your use, or rather overuse, of exclaimation points. They're ok once in a while to emphasize a point, but every other line isn't ok. It's not ok at all.

So watch that because it's one of those things that really bother me, like misused commas and starting sentences with 'also.' *shudders* I hate it.

But it's a good idea and since it's humourous, I'll let it pass this time. I thought it was going to be a rant or something about MySpace ... perhaps even a multi-chaptered rant. Poems are nice, too, though ...

Felicia.