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| zach 2007-11-01 ch 1,  | hey, tis me z. i loved this one it realy showed how i felt at one pointin my life. some of it not all of it. but i still loved it. hey you did repeat a couple of things but it adds to the love. |
| polka dots and addictions 2007-04-05 ch 1,  | i like the way the verses are all quite short, & i love the 'stale tear' bit. the lines 'my claustrophobia increases/ as the maniacs enter' made me smile a bit, but i think it works with the poem & its nicely with the first line of that verse too. & i liked the repetition of 'i scream' at the beginning of the ending verses...nicely written. ~Bex xx |