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| jellywelly 2008-02-28 ch 2,  | abuseoh wow i didn't realize this had many other poems lool again, this poem is really amazing. i like how you ended this one and the other really well :) |
| jellywelly 2008-02-28 ch 1, | abuseThis is amazing (the poem itself) and the message is so strong. wow. hopefully things will get better for you :) ...but does she have your writing abilities? se? LOL. xox, take care! - killerqueen-hearts. ps. fantastic poem! |
| Th3 UnKnowN 2007-10-24 ch 5, | abuseits weird, the same thing happened to me. I like this guy named Aiden at my school, like, really like him. But a few days ago one of my friends totally embarassed me by asking him if he liked me, he repliedby saying; "EW! No way! Every body says she's a lesbian. Aren't you?" I was totally heart broken but i kept inside, cause usually, this guy is the nicest most considerate person you will ever meet. But i still like him. |
| Th3 UnKnowN 2007-10-24 ch 1, | abusethis is really deep but (Cheesy i no) i can feel what your feeling. My sister does so many things wrong but she never gets into trouble cause she's like pretty and smart. My parents like never talk to me when she's around, and i'v been waiting 4 years for my mum to take me out so we can spend time together. So yeah, i feal your pain. p.s. can you R&R my poem 'How is it right'? thanx (if you want to) |
| Maurem 2007-10-13 ch 1, | abuseI just wanted to say that your poem was really good and i can tell that you really ment it. i can kinda relate, my parents ADORE my sister, they give her everything and she has no idea how lucky she is. your poems awesome |
| sia 2007-10-13 ch 8, anon. | abusehey wondering when you're going to update my not so average life..amazing story and its been a couple of months |
| Diana 2007-09-15 ch 8, anon. | abuseI have felt that way before, in dreams, in real life... |
| BrownEyedBeauty 2007-09-11 ch 8, | abuseI love your poems. They're so powerful and so full of emotion. I could relate to them when I was reading them, and that was awesome. I love the rhyme schemes of your poems as well, and I think that they have excellent imagery and really great inspiration behind them. They're sad and realistic, and that makes them all the better to read and relate to. I'm sorry for what you've been through; I think you've done a good job of putting it all in words, and I wish you all the best :) |
| Laughing In the Night 2007-08-30 ch 7, | abuseExactly. I've seen women and girls who starve themselves to look "good". Some boys too. |
| Black and White Dreams 2007-07-16 ch 1, | abusei'm sorry. i know how you feel... my brother is the same way. that last line is very powerful, but the rhyme isnt good and it takes away from the poem. if you lost the rhyme and fixed the punctuation on this it would be much better and would flow a lot smoother. ~Black and White Dreams~ |
| I Darkness 2007-07-14 ch 7, | abuseoh... That is so sad! i've read the whole thing and now I know how you feel. its good to let out your feelings even if I've forgotten, hidden and never saw mine. you should write more. it'll let you be free |
| thoughtsofwisdom 2007-07-04 ch 7, | abuseWow. Another wonderful and insightful poem. |
| spiking-cowgirl 2007-07-03 ch 7, | abuseWow. I don't know if others agree with me, but that was incredibly powerful. Thank you for reminding me why I choose to be different. Don't forget how awesome you are by being you. |
| TheEditor~ 2007-06-22 ch 6, anon. | abuseThere's no conclusion to this poem, it's just you repeating the same concept over and over. |
| TheEditor~ 2007-06-22 ch 5, anon. | abuseI'm speechless... (not in a good way) |