Reviews for Unwanted Guardian: Redux

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Aira Ifenn 2008-11-04 ch 7,	i love this rewritten version Unwanted Guardian!! You rock!! Big time! Me love you very much! Though I don't like to see Jason hurt, I love the rape scene... big sadistic grin bwahahahahahaha!! More blood! More gore! hehe.. okay, i'll stop before i creep you out... Seriously though, that rape scene is an improvement... :D
Kian 2008-09-16 ch 7,	OMG! The rape thing is so much darker than the original one. I was like, biting my nails off! I wonder what's gonna happen to Jason, though... I don't think he can "play it down" this time. I do think he undereacted in the original story... well... I'm just being my sour and vengeful self. Thanks!
Ebony Child 2008-09-09 ch 7,	Wow. I'm so glad I read it now because if I read the chapter when I barely had anytime I would have missed the awesomness of it! (because when I'm tired I tend to get pissy and ignore--in a way--some parts of a story that I am currently reading, heh) But I have a question. When and who said, “Did it ever occur to you that maybe he’s just trying to, I dunno, get things on the right track? That, maybe, he’s trying to rein himself in for your sake – to ‘train’ himself, in a manner of speaking, that no means no? Ever think of that, genius?” I don't remember... No you dont NEED to stop writing your rants, I just need to learn not to read them ;P I have always thought you educated me...is that at all weird the way I said that? lol Ooh I loved the way you ended it, totally believable that Jason died. But he DIDN't because then THAT would suck and I would have to Mapquest your house and burn it down in memory of dear Jacey Pacey. . . . . . . . . I'M JUST KIDDING! but i'm sure you got that Random: Have I mentioned I just love your writing, because I do! Loved this chapter and all that inhibit it (: :) PS- I want that shrine! XD PEACE!
Phoney132 2008-09-08 ch 7,	I loved the original of this and I have re-read this stories many times... but this, this was great. I was captivated the whole time, I think i might like this one better and thats hard cus I thought it couldn't get better. Good stuff I liked this re-written chapter the best so far.
MerieLiss 2008-09-08 ch 7,	I'm liking this version...a lot :O This chapter was great~!
Ebony Child 2008-08-13 ch 6,	I didn't think it was that boring, but I didn't exactly have the time of my life reading it. However I think that's because in the note you said you didn't like it--and I'm so weird (about things like that)that I think I subconsciously decided I wouldn't enjoy it, either. But on the brightside: you're a talented writer; from both perspectives of the story you write perfectly. Plus you make me use a dictionary far more often than other stories; and that's a good thing :) I needed to up my vocabulary... but now I have to remember the words Can't wait for the next chapter!
Rei Inaki 2008-07-21 ch 6,	Alright after comparing this to the original chapter, I think this ended in the right place. It would seem really drawn out with the pool episode at the end. If it had been in here it probably would have lost some of its emotion. After all the emotional ups and downs tacking the pool scene onto the end would just have put everyone into emotional overdrive and it wouldn't have the impact that it needs to have. I actually went back and reread all of the original chapter and i must say I'm so startled at how much your writing has changed. The original was good but this rewrite definitely was much better. I can see why it would take so long to rewrite this thing. One last thing to add. The kitchen scene kinda had me getting droopy eyed too and I cant figure for the life of me why! Though Jason's frustration later snapped me out of it. Anyway, I liked it so job done! As always I always look forward to reading something from you. So until next time, Thanks.
hentell_ann_rothorn 2008-04-14 ch 1,	it's me hentell and i am going to read this eddited version yeah cheers
Narcotic Affliction 2008-01-28 ch 5,	'Ello. I think you have a very nice story going on here. Even as cliche as vampire and human mix sounds, it seems as if yours has a bit more of a twist to it, a bit more original. I like it like that. Your characters are very interesting, especially Rori, though I suppose you intended it to be that way. Jason is such a lovable character, and it's so fun to read what he's thinking in situations such as in this chapter. Perhaps it's a bit sadistic that way, but nevertheless, it is amusing. And Jesus Christ, what a way to stick a cliffhanger in there. What a perfect spot to end! I launched out of my seat, wishing for a sixth chapter, and then I miserably died a little on the inside when it ended right there. Hopefully, you won't be cruel and update soon? Please?
Pat Springer 2008-01-27 ch 5,	Hey, hey. long time no review, I know, I'm lame. I don't leave a lot of reviews, mainly because of the lameness factor, so excuse me if this isn't very fancy.. but, this rewrite's going very well. I know how goddamn frustrating it is when you're rewriting old work and no one's giving you anything about how it's going, I'm in the process of doing that as well and it's a pretty thankless process. I totally see improvement in the story, not that there was anything wrong with the original but, over multiple years of writing your style's bound to change, and this is definitely a good change. Also, you've always had a lot of detail in your work and I really like that. There's never been a problem with the flow of the story or character development, you've got those two down absolutely perfect and it's awesome. And also, you have really strong characters, both personality and presence wise, serious props on that. Definitely looking forward to more rewrite chapters!
flannel boxers 2008-01-26 ch 5,	flawless, as usual. your writing never ceases to amaze me. i consider this story (the original and the remake) one of the best slash stories on fictionpress. good job, and update faster!
Ebony Child 2008-01-26 ch 5,	my god, i love Randy, he's so funny. definately what i need, big ol' black humor (since, y'know, i AM black) i read the original so i can see the hints of Jason's past coming through more clearly. it's nice. i'm not lost, heh. like i know i would be...
Rei Inaki 2008-01-26 ch 5,	Hello there again. And you're welcome. I know what its like when no one gives you feedback. I think I found one little mistake: the side of his face the text had made contact with shouldn't that be textbook? anyway, I must say that once again I have been sucked into this world, so good work. It takes something special to hold my attention so throughly. You kind of surprised me with a update so soon though. Needless to say I was happy about that. Yay Luke and Skye!Oh and Randy too.^-^ I missed those guys.
Rei Inaki 2008-01-18 ch 4,	Wonderful as always. Keep up the good work. I must say I was happy to see an update. I really like the way this rewrite is going. Its smoothing out the bumps in the story. Good job!
In.Silence.Sealed 2008-01-09 ch 2,	this story is amazing!! please if you get the chance, take a look at mine and give me a suggestion or two :) lovelovelove, quite x contrary

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