I like the trasition you used in this piece; from beginning to finish it was engaging and flowed very well. you did a good job at leaving lots of room for interpretation by putting out very concrete emotions but not being too specific. My favorite lines were the "soft with petals, dark and dank", and your last line. good use of imagery also. the only critique i would give is that your first line sounds stagnant and unneeded to me. besides that, nice job!