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| simpleplan13 2007-06-01 ch 1,   | This is very sad and beautifully written... the ending wasnt what i expected, but i liked it a lot... nice job |
| KonekOniko 2007-05-23 ch 1, | Oh god. I literally held my breath reading this piece; reading this piece as natural, like colliqual. People always try to make their poetry sound beautiful with pretty words and whatnot, but this is touching, simply. Simply, beautiful. |
| Luneko 2007-04-28 ch 1, | I really like this poem. For the most part, it flows very well, though the high concentration of exclamation points in the fourth stanza was a little distracting. But overall, this poem clearly and strongly conveys emotion, and the narrative voice sounds natural. The symmetry of the first and last stanzas was an effective touch. Thank you! |
| Parisienne 2007-04-25 ch 1, | You always touch my heart with your words. I can only aspire to write something as beautiful and eloquent. *gives you a hug* |
| Anime Freakizoid 2007-04-09 ch 1, | the last three lines completely spellbind me! i love the description, i'm sure everyone has been through something like that, it relieved me of a relationship I wasn't ready for...thanks (randomly...^_^) hope you had a good spring break! -anime freakizoid X^_^X |
| candi 2007-04-06 ch 1, | what ive just read is such beautiful writing, you can really feel the pain or it may be the fact that ive been there myself and ive felt the pain. Its been 17 years ago but now i can read your poem and smile knowing that im no longer in that place, in that pain. |
| disizwatdexsez 2007-04-06 ch 1, | I am speechless. |