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| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-06-07 ch 1,   | That was AMAZING! Talent doesn't even begin to do this justice, that was incredible beyond words. ... Now, with my obligatory praise out of the way, I have to ask you: What language was that at the beginning of the second-to-last chapter? I want to say that it was french, but I don;t want to sound ignorant... Also, while I'm getting into the specifics, I loved your use of symbolism, but I felt the image of "...trousers full of spiders and ricin powder." to be entirely too comical for the heavy mood of this poem. One last complaint would be the lack of capitalization, but that didn't really hurt this piece much, It's more that I'm a bit of a grammar nazi. |
| SorgesSklavin 2007-04-26 ch 1, | very nice...I like your style. Power to the atheists! |
| Shonen Ai 2007-04-18 ch 1, | Ah! This I absolutely LOVE! You have talent, I must confess. |
| Ironic Presence 2007-04-16 ch 1, | Interesting. True. Childlike, somewhat cynical (those might be contradicting, but not necessarily). People are disgusting creatures, all people. Not one is good. We all start off innocent and untouched by this foolish world, and then become the own foulness of it with time. But the fact that we see this problem perhaps proves that there may be a way out of it, even if the escape is in our own minds, in our thoughts. Of course, this does not mean that everyone can escape, but everyone is certainly capable of thinking. But I'll stop trying to be philosophical whilst giving this review. Obviously, then, your poem was thought-provoking, which is a plus. :P I like this work very much, actually. I liked the images, such as when you mentioned Scotland and the arctic hand. Keep up the good work! Sarcastic Presence |
| No Longer Posting Here 2007-04-12 ch 1, | Wow. I am in awe. Simply amazing creation! |
| Song of Shadows; 31:3 2007-04-07 ch 1, | I think this is a pretty good poem! My only problem was that the paragraph format: while I do think it fit the poem, it seriously gave me eyestrain and made it a bit difficult to understand. |