I really liked this, I think her little going away speech could have been a little more thought out and emotional. After all the girl was Blinded for life because of what that litte punk did. But I liked it. Anyways, I have this story called Hidden Behind Your Smile and I think you might like it if you read it. So yeah, check it out and let me know what you think. Bye and Keep Writing!

You introduce the whole story a little awkwardly... You keep referring to what he did as 'it', and it only makes the beginning drag on, when it could just move onward.
You did a good job of capturing her emotions and sorrow though.
I find it a little hard to believe though, that she would be left in the middle of the road and no one noticed her. You'd think that someone would drive by in that time...
The end is a little clunky...
But the last line pulls it all together.
Creepy, but well written.
Good job :)

Whoa. First of all, I'm psyched that you're psyched that I'm psyched.

Kay then. This story was...eerie. It was written wonderfully, but...that's just scary. Erm. Good job though. Yeah. I'm a go now. ;D

I think all I can say about this story was that it was just absolutely fantastic!