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| Rachael The Philosophical 2008-08-01 ch 1, | Victims not victimes |
| MandyMisfit 2007-04-07 ch 1, | It sounds like a poem...not a song. It has a good theme...it's sad. But again...sounds more like a poem than a song. |
| Taltush/MeiMei 2007-04-07 ch 1, | Strange as it may seem, the rhyming parts made it seem less like a song. Some of the rhymes felt too forced. I always feel like songs should be free(er), and something about parts of this gave me the opposite feeling. I really like the lines "so they could feels as if their lives have started Say hello the Dearly Departed". There's something about it that makes it very nice (obviously you thought so too... it's the title...). I'd just like to point out that it's spelled "victims". There's no "e". It's a nice piece of writing, but I just feel like some parts aren't enough like a song (love/dove). |