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| Nick 2007-04-07 ch 1,  | Raw. I kept expecting it to rhyme at some point- the words are like a pulse, but witihout the boundaries of similar vowls. The only improvement I would make is to add punctuation; I think it would give it more power. Anyway, cheers mate. |