this has been sitting in my inbox for ages. finals has given me the free time (that i should be using to study) to go through and read everything i've been putting on hold for what i call "the sucky real life".

the visuals were awesome, yeah...there's a difference here from your early writings, and that's remarkable in and of itself. ^^

Nice start! Can`t wait for more :)

you know, i read this twice before commenting on it, but youve done a great job capturing the dream state, as well as an odd kind of first person narrative. very well done :)