Wow, this is really good. I like the occasional tangents, they somehow add to the story. I think you should definitely continue. Nice vocab. Is this fiction?

Ok, I'm fucking faving this. God, the title just pulled me in, and...and...GOD! I came in expecting something and walked out with something totally different! Just your style is absolutely amazing! I love this! The descriptions were awesome...everything! ok sorry...sorry...I'm just so excited...
I LOVE IT! I can't wait to read what else you've got.

~Ewelina