 B. M. Reed 2007-11-06 . chapter 1I really enjoyed this poem. All of your poems have a similar format; the rush of stanzas and then a sudden singular line, but unlike many writers, you manage to make each poem you write brand new. When I read this poem, I don't think of another one of yours that I've read. I like that.
This poem to me read like it should have rhymed in quatrains. I know it's free verse, and that not every stanza had four lines, but I automatically gave it that sing-songy rhythm in my head. This threw off my balance a bit, but after re-reading it, I forced myself to not think of it as a quatrain. =)
All of your poems are so honest. So honest that it breaks your heart to read them, but in a good way. It's like a good John Cusack movie, really. The speaker in this poem is so unsure in the beginning. As the poem progresses, after the lines "Seperated by/Oceans of cold emptiness" the movement takes place, and the speaker seems to regain himself (or herself). I like the story that takes place. There is much to be speculated here.
Great job on your poem. I really liked analyzing it. You have a knack for writing very heartfelt and very human poetry. |