woah thats a really intresting idea... i like it. Keep writing!

Interesting. I like pirates. :) Slightly cheesy, but intriguing enough.

Happy Writing
--WWK

i haven't even read the firsst sentence of this chapter yet, but i'm SO EXCITED THAT IT'S IN TORONTO! now i can go where the characters go...

stop switching from the past and present tense...it's annoying to read...also i think you should separate cedric's thoughts from axelia's. people will think that she's the one in the later part. and i have a question: what is "0" supposed to mean? is that supposed to separate the time sequence or something? anyhow, nice filling us in on some stuff, even tho i think you mentioned her dad and mom being drained a bit much. i got it already! i'm jealous of your story..yeahh good job...keep writing
-vesta

Fantastico! Short, yes, but no less satisfying. There was some really excellent detail in this, like the last part. Great job. I can't wait to see what's going to happen next!

~carm~

Definitely intersting... I wonder if Cedric's appearance has to do with the deaths... I'm also curious about how Eli and Cedric are going to deal with their current situation... I hope he proves to be a good guy. :)

Lovely chapter. I'm absolutely loving this story :)

Update as soon as you cnn!

~carm~

damn! i wasn't the first one to review your chapter...but yeah anyways :D just wanted to let you know that you shouldn't put each new sentence in a whole new paragraph practically! you hardly have any paragraphs. but this is probably my fav chapter out of all of them :D i really like axelia. i love her name too ;) now i wonder why there was a suicide..i kinda feel like i know what happened...but i'm keeping it a secret from everyone and you! especially everyone since i think i know whats coming next... :D can't wait for chapter 4! :D:D (ps. now i left a long review. happy? now u must leave even longer oness!! :D:D cyz at 4:30 :D [nerds] lmao :P )

I have to say, I now want a floating cow. Do you know where I can purchase one in England, or would I have to have it shipped in?

cool story! I like it!

Sounds promising and very exciting to me! I'll be definitely waiting for the updates on this one!
Kudos for the flying cow! I've never heard of something like that before! :)

Loved the first two chapters. Hope you update soon.
evilangelkitty~jesse

heyy.,
omg!! i Luved itt so muchh ...
write mre pleeZee .. =D

This is an excellent story so far. I love the characters. They're so realistic and likable :) Good job on this, and I can't wait for more!

~carm~

your editor will not approve if you do not follow her guidelines. Ohh