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| Ravyn Starkweather 2007-04-16 ch 1,  | abuseI really liked this one. It shows the roller coaster up-and-down that relationships take us through. It was great that he showed up in the end because I had my doubts that he really WAS just using her, but it turns out that he wasn't. This was very sweet. It didn't need to be any longer. --Ravyn. |
| reader 2007-04-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseWell written and flows well. but plotline doesn't seem complete. ending doesn't seem to refer to anything.. maybe if you tie it specifically to his lateness or to her pregnancy it would make the story seem like it has more of a point |
| Mrs. Drama Lover 2007-04-13 ch 1, | abusenice |