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a bitter kiss.
2007-04-09
ch 1,
abuseAw, haha, it was sweet. Although the girl wasn't exactly a favorable character for me, there was just something about all the "Die!" comments that irked me. But I do like her ideals on nature and the environment. :)

Another line, that you could probably edit:

[Then he sat on the one beside it, while I nursed my aching **.]

The word '**' here, sort of... throws off the 'semi-romantic' vibe you have going on. But it's ok, it was really minor. :)

Great story!
dare me
2007-04-09
ch 1,
abusei felt this warm fuzzy feeling inside me when i read it.
aw.
it's wonderful.
yoh01
2007-04-09
ch 1,
abuseThe summary's catchy...

And I find this story VERY cute!!

It's the first thing I read here in this site and I'm glad.

Plus, the whole point of "I AM courting you" and "I AM marrying you" is what made it perfect!!

I understand your author's note though. I once "accidentally" destroyed flowers that were given to me, too.
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