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| a bitter kiss. 2007-04-09 ch 1, | abuseAw, haha, it was sweet. Although the girl wasn't exactly a favorable character for me, there was just something about all the "Die!" comments that irked me. But I do like her ideals on nature and the environment. :) Another line, that you could probably edit: [Then he sat on the one beside it, while I nursed my aching **.] The word '**' here, sort of... throws off the 'semi-romantic' vibe you have going on. But it's ok, it was really minor. :) Great story! |
| dare me 2007-04-09 ch 1, | abusei felt this warm fuzzy feeling inside me when i read it. aw. it's wonderful. |
| yoh01 2007-04-09 ch 1, | abuseThe summary's catchy... And I find this story VERY cute!! It's the first thing I read here in this site and I'm glad. Plus, the whole point of "I AM courting you" and "I AM marrying you" is what made it perfect!! I understand your author's note though. I once "accidentally" destroyed flowers that were given to me, too. |