| Reviews for Fallen sky |
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Lolitroy 12/24/12 . chapter 1Wow... you've amazed me haha. The feeling is awesome. |
MysticGypsyGirl 9/27/09 . chapter 1That was absolutely beautiful! I really love: "We've seen the sky falls down but the little stars remain faraway." It made me feel so mystical and excited! Keep up the good work! |
Imperia 11/3/08 . chapter 1amazing, full of emotion and heart. i can relate to the feelings in this piece. |
Erlkoenigin 10/14/08 . chapter 1Dieses Bild mit dem fallenden Himmel und den Sternen gefällt mir gut! Ebenfalls eine schöne Woche! |
sleeplessblue 4/9/07 . chapter 1This is very pretty, I especially like the lines: "we've seen the sky falls, but the little stars still remain faraway. If time goes back, I'd repeat the same mistakes." I hope you don't mind if I give a little constructive critisism too, though. It should be "we've seen the sky _fall_" - singular not plural (without the 's' on the end). The line, "actually I'm nothing from nobody" is a little hard to understand. Did you mean, "I'm nothing to anybody"? This line: "they even don't try to understand me", needs to be "they don't _even_ try to understand me." The line right after it is confusing too: "don't say you know from me in this world." I'm not sure what thought you're trying to convey by it. I hope this has been a little helpful, and I really liked this one. I'd like to see you rewrite it 'cause I think it would be even better if you worked on the grammer. :) |