I'm going to say that you have a gift for this. Alot of the time people just throw words together and call it a poem, most of the time the words have nothing to do with eachother, but your writing is just...wow.

i don't have any constructive criticism, or anything, since i don't know much about writing, but i enjoyed reading this and i think you did a good job.

T_T it was great...you have one spelling error its light... but i can't write poetry as good so i'm bad at telling any one if they did any thing wrong...so i think its great

really good. but really dark. look on the bright side of things and yes i knowim being a hypcryte

Very good. You might one to make the lines fit a bit more by having the same number of sylables with the ones you're rhyming with.

Hey!
Great poem, it's really touching and thoughtful
great use of metaphors.

Masterpiece =D

this is amazing
just like you
glad i could assist with two words LOL
reading your work makes me so happy
you're so talented
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