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Krustyknuckles 2007-04-23 . chapter 1
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Very interesting. It needs a plot, unless this is chapter 1. I've read several short stories, and none as short as yours ever went into murder mystery. Sure, you have the problem of the dead guy, and some sort of detective mastermind with a super computer (you inferred, but not too well) and a vampire's train of thought is there to solve it. There's too many questions left open, and for the ridiculous evidence to be pointed out by the dead man himself is somewhat out of key (I guess it's not to be knocked until tried).
Good job overall, though! I hope you can give me a review of my story.
-Krustyknuckles
BlueAngel0104 2007-04-17 . chapter 1
Really interesting. It's really good. I'd love to have your input for my story, The Underdogs, if you ever get the chance. Keep writing!
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