This is really beautiful. The detailed imagry here is so well done, and your words flow wonderfully. I especially loved the description of the bird in the beginning. Great work, keep writing, and thanks so much for the review.

no one says "spurned" anymore ok bud?
your poem made me puke everywhere too.
im sorry im sorry

your poem was good...
IF YOU LIKE PUKING!1
hhahahaha

The thing is, at first it feels a bit like empty beauty, but it's not actually that empty. It's quite nice. I mean, everything is beautiful, but the personality is low, so it's not spectacular. It's simply very good. Adding more personality and emotion to it would make it better, but it's nice like this too. Beautiful.