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| ayadora 2007-08-26 ch 1,  | abuseliving in America, we all suffer from an eating disorder. unless you raise your own food, I guess. Or you don't live in America. I like "unemployed, fired by my body". Makes me laugh. |
| All Alone With Her Thoughts 2007-08-22 ch 1, | abuseOh wow, this is very stunning and I'm almost lost for words. There are so many beautiful lines in this piece, I won't bother picking them out. Amazing job. Thanks for the review on "Down Another Rabbit Hole". I actually agree with you, and am working on changing the second stanza which I'm not wild about either. Rowan. |
| Countess Chocula 2007-06-09 ch 1, | abuse"or sucking on an ice cube/to cool your frayed nerves and/so it looks like you are eating./(it feels like eating)/(what is this feel?)" That part stands out to me so much. It's like...it could be a poem on its own. It sums up the whole idea, the whole feel of this piece. Shivers and chills... |
| GirlxAnachronism 2007-05-09 ch 1, | abuseYou are so amazing! I love the way you describe the never ending cycle. I also suffer from an eating disorder, not saying it to brag but i just understand what you are talking about. vomited my peasant offering to porcelain gods. so amazing! This is one of my Favorites. |
| in a jar pk 2007-04-30 ch 1, | abuse'peasant offering to porcelain gods' and '(80 lbs and counting and/do.you.love.me.yet?)' wowzaa. this is absolutely gorgeous. i'm sure that by now you're tired of my reviews telling you how good you are, but i honestly can't critique this piece!! xx |
| queen of catastrophe. 2007-04-29 ch 1, | abuseThere is no words to explain this. Lovely. Beautiful. Bittersweet. The last line is really spine tingling("80 lbs and counting and do.you.love.me.yet?"). I had never went through an eating disorder however I really give kudos to many people that realize that being thin isn't always in. *adds to faves* Keep on writing -Mika |
| lackluster 2007-04-12 ch 1, | abuse"a new promise lays,/virginal and craving a testride;/a thought, an innocent gleam/of fucked glitter rushes through" i love those lines. the ending too, is just heartbreakingly beautiful and it really captures the reader. makes everything all the more real. |
| Lead Girl 2007-04-12 ch 1, anon. | abuse"do.you.love.me.yet?" That seems to be a recurring theme in your poems about weight. This seems to be a pretty side of anorexia. The words you use, the imagery make it seem almost...beautiful. The last part really hit me hard though, "'baby,' i say to myself, so that no one will hear, 'you're finally getting there'". Favorites: "my heartbeat cries out--wait, don't forget me" "suddenly i am 3 inches tall and unemployed, fired by my body" |
| the.next.day.i.hate.them. 2007-04-10 ch 1, | abuseI don't know what to say, ha ha. (You: holding back a sigh of relief..) So, this was good... Yeah... |
| poetic abortion 2007-04-10 ch 1, | abuseI love that ending, I love how everything before that point just sets it up for one big last b-a-n-g, and then you have that ending that pierces your heart and makes you feel . . . Well, alive. I adore: ""you're finally getting there". (80 lbs and counting and do.you.love.me.yet?)" Simply, because it just speaks everything you where trying to say and it ends it nicely, too. Wonderful; really, really wonderful. - Noelle |