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Kayla Christine 2008-03-25 ch 4,	abuseI love this story! It's so original, and I'm dying to read more. I have to admit, it's not my normal thing but I'm impressed and I'm glad I gave it a chance. Can't wait until you update! I'm working on a story myself, Chasing Princes, and any read/reviews would be appreciated! Thanks! Kayla Christine
HJWynne 2007-06-04 ch 3,	abuseWerewolf PMS! I have that sometimes! lol This is seriously hilarious; you're lucky I already went to the bathroom before I read this, or else I likely would have peed myself . . . Awkward. Anyway, keep writing! ~The Quill Lady, or RFLupin . . . Narf!
C.Sabbadin 2007-05-25 ch 2,	abuse"It's not my fault that demon showed up! Nor is it my fault you two had to duke it out above Rodeo Drive! I could have told you there were several preternatarually sensitive people in the area!" I calmly reasoned. It is spelled "preternaturally." Other than that I am still minding this amusing.
Not Dead Fred 2007-05-25 ch 1,	abuseHi every one! Thanks for reviewing! I just wanted to say sorry for all my errors. I'm stressed out, what with exam week and college looming after that...well anyway I'll update soon! ~Muse~
C.Sabbadin 2007-05-24 ch 1,	abuseOne such thing was this car like cloud thing…not really particularly advanced in appearance, but with the right cloud you could reach the speed of sound sometime light. You said "sometime" and I assume you meant "sometimes." Also it seems odd that an angel would be hungry. Aren't they all godly and such? I like the narrative so far; she seems like an interesting person. Though I can guess that she will meet a guy on earth. If that is not true please remember that it is only a guess.
DarkBlysse 2007-05-24 ch 3,	abuseYaay! Update! "...you always hear about in the movies; tall..."--It should be a colon (:) after 'movies' and not a semicolon. I loved how you said the werewolf has a 'time of the month.' Lol. PWS--Pissy Werewolf Syndrome, eh? "...that he can transformer whenever..."--Should just be 'transform.' Okay, you've got codenames (which are awesome, BTW) for everyone--except the werewolf. What's his codename? "Of the human, two..."--Should be 'humans' Haha! I love Pinky and the Brain so much! Narf! Haha, again! Smee! Haha, thrice! I love Dark Wing Duck! Best superhero ever! "through the boat(it's interior had..."--There should be a space after 'boat' and no apostrophe in 'its.' "The fought for several..."--Forgot the 'y' in 'they.' "We will not tolerate in fighting in this orginization."--Should be 'any fighting' not 'in.' "'...Fallen to join our ranks, have they?' a malicious glint in his eye"--Whoa, the end of that needs fixin'. "'...have they?' he said with a malicious glint in his eye." Noo! What's the assignment? Update! Update! Ga! I loved this chapter and all of those old references (DWD!) made me feel like I was 5 again. Great work!
remae 2007-05-24 ch 3,	abuseI like the original plot and everything. It seems fun, and I lovee Erkel! So Pinky must be pretty lovable/funny too (: update soon!
Icy Vampire Chick 2007-05-23 ch 3,	abuseCan't...stop...laughing... Bwahahahahahahaha ! OMC - this was so freaking hilarious - I couldn't stop gigling when I read the code names and the descriptions of the characters ! And the vaampire and the werewolf exchanging nice, witty remarks - so funny ! Please write more - I love the hilarity of it all ! UPDATE ! ~Jo
BloodKitten 2007-05-22 ch 2,	abuseI like this! Keep it up! X
DarkBlysse 2007-05-01 ch 2,	abuseSighs I love how refreshingly funny this story is. I couldn't help giggling a little when Amaranth decided she wouldn't look THAT weird in LA (I love where you got her name from BTW). Sweet! It's a British demon! A POTC British demon, too! That was priceless. Just one little grammatical error--"I giggled to my self." It should be 'myself' an dnot 'my self,' that's all. Whoop--another grammar thing. "...‘questioned’ with out contaminating..."--Should be 'without' and not 'with out.' "It is, no doubt an unclean process..."--There needs to be a comma after 'no doubt.' "...should appreciate it if other angels did not..."--I've got a question, and perhaps a correction here. In all other places you used the word 'Angel,' the 'A' is capitalized, but not here. Is there a reason, or is it just a type-o? Also, a little later you capitalize the 'D' in 'Demon' but you didn't when talking about Loki's tracker. Again, is it intentionally done, or just a mistake that they're not all capitalized? Great chapter! I'm quite intrigued to read more, now that Amaranth is off to London to police the world and keep us humans safe from all sorts of nasties.
HJWynne 2007-04-30 ch 2,	abuseNew chapter, yay! I can't wait to see where this is going; hopefully somewhere that's loud and action-packed and snarky. Is that word? Someone told me it wasn't, but whatever. Your story rocks, keep it up. ~The Quill Lady
DarkBlysse 2007-04-27 ch 1,	abuseOhhkay--it IS a girl (as per my confustion from 'The Smite Button'). I love the part about 8 out of 10 angels having OCD. I would, too, if I were them and had to go anywhere near Earth! Great work, again. I can't wait for you to add more to this story.
Pink Apple Tea 2007-04-23 ch 1,	abuseBrilliant concept, i love it. Keep writing!
HJWynne 2007-04-12 ch 1,	abuseYay! New Angel story! Put something in about people who clog up the halls like fast food does to your ateries! ~The Quill Lady
FreakierThanThou 2007-04-11 ch 1,	abuseHa! Silly and hilarious, sounds fun. Ohh... bad Amaranth. She's grounded! Heehee, great concept. One little error that wasn't actually part of your story, but in the summary you said noone instead of no one. And that's a great reason for getting grounded. Trying to smite someone! Keep writing, -Freaky

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