 Jackie I 2007-04-10 . chapter 1Sad story.. good start. Keep going. I can't wait to see what happens. The disaster seemed a bit abrupt though. Its hard to picture the loss of family characters without a base of them. maybe you could add some flashbacks of memories to get to know her parents too. and the life she lost, you know?
otherwise, i think the friendship is going to grow and I really like it!! |