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| ironicdeathx 2007-12-15 ch 2,  | abuseThis story has potential to be really good, but it get's rather confusing at parts. You should have a more obvious transition between the PoV's as opposed to putting his PoV in italics and hers in normal font. Anyhow, the plot is amazing but the story just needs a bit more description and a bit less dialogue. Also needs a bit more explaining through-out the story as opposed to leaving everything to the end. |
| Jayjack 2007-11-03 ch 10, | abuseawe. end. |
| Jayjack 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abuseha. wow he does sound hot. i hate how EVERY author describes the guys as being 6' or higher. geez. |
| angeleyez61888 2007-10-06 ch 10, | abuseawesome i like how this story ended |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-07-27 ch 10, | abuseNice job :) |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-07-27 ch 9, | abuseIf Emily's 16 then how is she graduating? |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-07-27 ch 3, | abuseI'm really liking your story. Usually, short stories (like yours, which is only 10 chapters) can't pull off being that good. Yours, however, is really good and I like it. Good job. :D |
| bekahlu 2007-06-25 ch 10, | abuseaww! I liked chapter nine, the suspense was great, and I thought you had it well planned out! Now they are all moving on in chapter 10! It reminds me of the graduation song! And Sean and Emily are going out! HOW SWEET!! I liked the end to this story! I can't wait to read some of your next stories!! |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2007-06-25 ch 10, | abuseAw.. very nice ending. Glad to hear that she was okay. ^-^ - LL |
| slightlyaddictedx3 2007-06-24 ch 10, | abusehey!awesome story!! :)) |
| Nicola Heartache 2007-06-24 ch 1, | abuseCute! |
| I Quoth Nevermore 2007-06-24 ch 10, | abuseAwwies! I liked how you ended this. Very swet. Great job! |
| ihrtbks 2007-06-24 ch 10, | abuseYAY! Happy ending, and the bad guy dies. The hotel scene was quite intense, and I loved it! GREAT JOB! |
| kstar129 2007-06-08 ch 8, | abuseI know what that's like but try and hurry!This stuff is awesome! |
| Kohlomere 2007-06-04 ch 2, | abuseAnother cantankerous review at an ungodly hour...anyway your initial descriptions of your characters are rather bland. I know it's hard to write with a marginal amount of "be" verbs but it gets tedious after a while. Good job, E. |