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| ernest 2008-05-31 ch 8, anon. | abuseboobs |
| Boochers 2008-05-21 ch 8,  | abuseI must say, this is very well written. I've never seen a main character that was an underground fighter and a girl. I like the twists and I look forward to the next chapter! |
| MatsuGlare 2008-05-21 ch 2, | abuse--Low there-- this one is really excellent, i tell you! I'm happy you told me about your fic. I totally love it!~ hehehe...your characters are very unique, especially Jenna...i so love her! haha...i can't imagine how they became bestfriends! Anyway, the plotline is very original and your writing style is really superb. I just have finished reading chapter 1 and i gotta say i'll add this one on my faves...updates please! =) jaane...=) |
| Tnayoub 2008-02-04 ch 2, | abuseSo far this story seems original with the main character being a 14-year-old underground fighter...weird. Anyway, the dialogue seems to fit the mannerisms of a young, rebellious teenager. However, the prank call to that girl's ex at the end of this chapter did sound a little unrealistic. It seemed like it went too fast...like his reaction should've been more shocking or something. |
| BriRy 2007-12-23 ch 7, | abusethis story is going great so far. please continue it, i'm very intrigued and can't wait to see what happens next. |
| Guagna 2007-08-16 ch 1, | abuseWow. The prolouges intense! I can't wait to read the rest =] |
| Melissa Norvell 2007-08-08 ch 7, | abuseAnother grand chapter! Keep up the good work! |
| Jason 2007-08-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseDear Darcy, You are great. Love, Minkles and Jason hahahaha Darc, I only read the prologue, because that's all I have the attention span for, but I liked it. I hope you get lots of positive reviews and get your book published and become famous..and share some of your money with me to buy cookies =P. Love, Jason (your best friend before you became famous) |
| ernest 2007-08-02 ch 7, anon. | abusePretty intense story. It's starting to get exciting. Finally. More cursing please. |
| DevilsNeverCry 2007-07-25 ch 2, | abuseThis is a very cool story, Tak is an interesting character, and the story flows very well, I'll have to read the next chapter soon, thanks for reviewing my story. |
| BriRy 2007-07-24 ch 1, | abusewow, i just read the prolouge and that was very impressive. very detailed and descriptive. it looks like this will be good. i'll come back and read more and give you more of my thoughts in the very near future. |
| Melissa Norvell 2007-07-23 ch 5, | abuseThis...Is really good. It's nice to see a story that is actually well-written around here. There are so few that are actually good (most poorly written and horribly clich'ed) I'm definitely going to put this on my alerts list so I can follow future chapters. If you have the time or simply want to, feel free to check out some of my works. |
| maria 2007-07-22 ch 2, anon. | abusewow! i like this story!! im going to read the other chapters now bcuz its so gud! =] |
| Nailliv 2007-07-21 ch 6, | abuseOh, interesting story. The prolouge made me curious, so I read more. There are some parts that confuse me. The change of times and/or point of view kind of threw me off for a second, because I'm one of those people that need something to let me know of the change. x] But it's pretty good so far, and I can't wait to read more. |
| Adma the Hip 2007-07-20 ch 2, | abuseThis is very interesting, I love it :) keep it up, go Tak XD |