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| Sundown 2007-10-24 ch 2,   | short, but perfect. Another beautifully written chapter, I am really enjoying this. Please continue when you feel the need! |
| Sundown 2007-10-24 ch 1, | Really strong character coming through. This chapter made me laugh, which I hardly do on this site due to actual funny pieces of writing. Well written, well voiced. Onto the next one! |
| sin olvido 2007-04-16 ch 1, | Wow, awesome description! I love how we get close to this boy... and, I must add, great use of a first person narrator! Usually authors' narrators tend to be so much like themselves (meaning, the authors' presences overwhelm the prose) that the prose is either ineffective. But in this piece, you've done an amazing job with the descriptions, especially with the boy's father and his Santa Claus story, along with the paragraph about the girl at the lunch table. Really, there's a story begging to be told here, and, with your capabilities, you'll definitely be able to tell it. Bravo, my dear. On my favourites; I'll definitely be reading more of your work, too. :) ~Cristina PS: Thanks so much for the review! |
| Hakajin 2007-04-11 ch 1, | Oh, this is wicked! Especially the last line. Oh man, that was great. Totally defied expectations. I like your topic too. It seems to me like the more people try to know themselves, the less they know, because they get caught up in trying to define themselves by just one thing or some kind of ideal. And I like how you describe how people will define each other by those sorts of things. Anyway, I like the casual writing style. It fits the story. Great job! |