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| In the Rye 2007-04-12 ch 1,  | abuseIt seems your idea was lost in wanting to sound poetic. It's rather discombobulated. |
| Single Black Rose 2007-04-12 ch 1, | abuseI definately anticipated something more corny that what is here. However, now that I have read and reread what you have written in this poem, I find that when in love, there is less to strain the mind and the body, in pure love, what this poem is beginning to describe, the spirit is free. You may not want praise, I don't know, but I cannot help it here, your words have spoken to me, and my applause shall now speak to you. Congratulations! ~Rose |