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| jtianity 2008-11-11 ch 1,   | wow. this is one heck of a story. it's so cute. i just love the oddness and...randomness of everything. it's great! you're really good. hope you write again! |
| jj 2008-11-11 ch 1, | that is the cutest oneshot i have ever read! wow, finally. someone good at oneshots |
| AbbeyEileen 2008-10-27 ch 1, | CUTE! It made me giggle and smile, which probably isn't good, seeing as I'm in class... but I liked it. The last paragraph didn't quite explain-- did they miss the train, or are they on the train when they meet up again? Marshmallow bushes. Amusing. (:f |
| Kjersti 2008-10-15 ch 1, | Incredibly cute story. I loved it. :) |
| the ignorance of it all. 2008-08-19 ch 1, | It was adorable, well-written, and used a good time line. =) The only thing I would critisize is the end. Names define people too much. Insinuating that the conversation continues after that question would also make the end seem less abrupt. Just a thought. |
| artificial destiny 2008-07-29 ch 1, | i liked it! cute end. |
| reddishrocker 2008-05-22 ch 1, | OMG! So awesomely spontaneous!lol. I like random sweetness like that! |
| One-Hand Clap 2008-04-20 ch 1, | I love the dialogue between the two characters, Patrick and... er... The protagonist a lot. It's so sweet, and the character development you've done is so indepth that you can actually understand the way Patrick's mind tends to 'skip a beat'! And apart from that, the origonality of the poem makes it truly endearing! It's just a charming read! - Clap Trap, from Review Marathon [link in profile] |
| LiMay 2008-03-26 ch 1, | haha odd guy XD uber cute but odd. XD |
| found.eventually 2008-03-11 ch 1, | God, that was so random. But i loved it! Oh, and yes, the power of gossipy (yes i do realize that's not a word) magazines. XP |
| TheNarglesWillEatYou 2008-03-01 ch 1, | that was cool, i like the randomness of it all! |
| Sour Lullaby 2008-03-01 ch 1, | Hah! This cracked me up. What bizarre hilarity you have created! I love it... |
| Erisah Mae 2008-01-16 ch 1, | This is extraordinarily sweet in a quirky kinda way. Nice. Erisah |
| twinklee 2008-01-06 ch 1, | haha that was cute! Love the spontaneous kiss and stranger idea :] keep writing! |
| Elizabeth07 2008-01-01 ch 1, | This story was so cute! I loved it. I like the ending very much, I think it suits this story. If you ever wanted to write a full length story, with these characters, I would read it. |