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| Tytherpol 2007-08-02 ch 1,   | i love the first stanza of this. the rest didn't appeal to me that much. |
| simpleplan13 2007-06-08 ch 1, | I like the whole idea of beginning with a puzzle and then ending with a puzzle and the middle is nice too |
| Ajna 2007-05-07 ch 1, | The format, the wording, and your expressions are great for the topic of this piece. Very nicely done! |
| TylerB 2007-04-20 ch 1, | The structure of the poem as a whole seemed just a tad bit off, which hurt the cohesiveness of the whole peice. I did like what you're portraying here, though. I also liked the way you ended it, the last stanza is my favorite. |
| review 2007-04-16 ch 1, | haha this poem is sad T__T i was thinking about writing a poem about a puzzle but i didnt know how. |
| tearing hands 2007-04-15 ch 1, | Awesome poem. I love the style. I especially like the first stanza. |
| Aquafied 2007-04-15 ch 1, | this speaks my situation or perhaps i am reflecting myself upon it is there ever a perfect image are we striving for it, are we it without knowing perfect does not exist in a perfect world. |
| recycle rhymes 2007-04-14 ch 1, | aw yeah love is a confuzzling puzzle that never ever ends. sad eh? ah well nice work. |
| Ashelin 2007-04-13 ch 1, | Man, I felt like that forever it seemed. I loved this poem, the imagery and everything. I like relating things to puzzles and puzzle pieces, because life seems like a puzzle a lot. Great job. |
| aya's notebook 2007-04-13 ch 1, | puzzling. lol. a nice read. |
| Summerdazed 2007-04-12 ch 1, | hmm, you're right this is a puzzling piece, i can't seem to connect them together as well, maybe it's your whole point. review me if you're free! ^_^ =summerdazed= |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-04-12 ch 1, | I like how the words intertwine in this, and kind of become representative of the title and the theme. The emotion is specific and relatable, therefore it draws in the reader. Well written. |
| DemonicTruths 2007-04-12 ch 1, | Good poem. I like the meaning to it. Keep writing. |
| burning in effigy 2007-04-12 ch 1, | really liked the metaphor (formatting is cool- four stanzas, four words each) "triangular insertion without feeling/was there a perfect fit?"- gosh i loved that excellent job :) |
| The Postscript 2007-04-12 ch 1, | Beautiful. The whole feel of the poem works, sort of a discombobulated feel . . . trying to twist the words of the poem in order to make it work. Reminds me of when I was a little girl . . . my dad and I used to work on puzzles a lot together. Wonderful write. Keep writing, k. |