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| Kusje 2007-04-13 ch 1,   | I think that the end of the poem was unexpected, because I really got the feeling of some positive energy here, but I'm glad that I was caught off guard. Good ryhming scheme, however, don't push yourself too much when trying to ryhme. There are some lines in this poem where I saw words that seemed 'pushed' in to make it seem like it would flow better. You don't always have to ryhme; free-verse is good also :) Good job though. I really did enjoy reading it. |
| PocoSnow15 2007-04-13 ch 1, | Tortured souls...best way to end it. I just really liked this, about how some people just don't know were we belong. And I loved your use of people and cities. Great, great job! |
| Crescent Fairy 2007-04-13 ch 1, | This was really interesting. I enjoyed reading it. The beginning part of the poem was cool. I thought it showed how things happen all over the world at the same time with different people's troubles or hurts. |
| Comawhite13 2007-04-13 ch 1, | I really like this poem :) It reminds me of the song Land of Confusion by Genesis. Are you able to upload documents? I seem to be having a LOT of trouble-- I keep getting an error. :( |