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| Martha. 2008-06-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseLike a snake in a grass, you kept this one sneaky Amy ;] Anywho, it was cute, but because I've just watched house, I imagined Matt as Wilson. I don't know why. |
| Insomiak 2008-01-19 ch 1,  | abuse"I guess I'm out of the closet." I love how bored he is about it xD This is just because I'm a crazy Stephen King follower, but trying using less adverbs. Instead of writing "he said happily", try making all the words around what he said make the reader know he's saying it happily. ...get it? Anyway, UPDATE. :D |
| firestar267 2007-12-09 ch 1, | abuseAww, i like this :) It was sweet |
| failte200 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuseHeh - that was a long way to go just for that... in a one-shot, too. :) 'S okay, though. I unnerstand how it can be when the muses hit like that. Not much you can do about it. Now, if this were Chap 1 of a story where something was going to happen to TEST the boy's new 'ship, that'd be different. Think about it. |
| nonaccount 2007-09-11 ch 1, | abuseDanny really decided to come out, just like that? That's pretty brave of him. I'm not sure if you're going to continue this, but I'd be interested in reading more. :) |
| magalina 2007-06-22 ch 1, | abuseaw, that was cute! Is it just a one shot? keep it up! |
| Satan'z Myth 2007-06-15 ch 1, | abuseFor a first story, that's rather good... I enjoyed it, and hope to see more coming from you soon. Also, it is always better to write/read stuff using first person... As in, you write "I" and the thoughts going through "my mind" :P |
| sweets555 2007-04-18 ch 1, | abusecute! matt sounds like a sweetie, totally someone i'd fall for. great job! |
| acriter 2007-04-16 ch 1, | abuseSo good! I want to know more! How does Danny handle it and stuff? |
| Homophobes.WhoNeedsThem 2007-04-16 ch 1, | abuseOH MY GODS D:! It's really amazing __> But I would. ARRGH. IT'S SO CUTE! And... And... BELIEVABLE! I want more, more I say! More than a one-shot! Arrgh! Matt's so CUTE! This is too awesome for words D: You're like, as good as Stupid Post-It Notes! Seriously! WRITE MORE D< Please? |