Lol, subtile little hint :D

I think this is fine.
It's well writen and is very memorable.
Well done :D

Hey overall i really liked the flow the only thing that i think needs a little work is the fifth stanza. it throws a kink in the flow of the poem. Other than that i really enjoyed it. Keep writing!

dude, this was a beautiful poem.
the over use of the dashes (thought it may be your style) are not needed though, it takes away from the simplicity and complete beauty of your poem.
"and ambition’s a rumor

you never believed,"
I love that, perfect moment.
I would say your grammar is fine the way it is.
I wouldn't change a thing about this poem.
Nicely done.
I shall read some of your other work.
Thanks for having me start of my day of reading fictionpress work with something rad.
Nicely done and keep it up.
take care

-N