first thing first,

1. cheryl was a humongous

2. mandy was just a stupid follower

3. is bishop for real? i feel like slapping him. why did he feel that he need to date james? and treated her like crap while dating her? it's one of the thing i dont understand.

ok, all that out of my system now i have to say, i LOVE ur ending!

and of course, i love grant too. who woudnt?

hehe, cute ending. absolutely hilarious too, i loved it. ;)

Wow, this is an amazing story, really grabbed a hold of me. :-) An original and fresh read as a whole, from the beginning to the very end. The idea for the beginning is great, though I think the first part (before the dashes) drags on a little as I remember my eyes rather skipping through it. It's an interesting introduction but heavy to read, it doesn't have that easy, inviting flow to it.

And then there's the thing with my pet peeve, the overly and unfortunately incorrect use of the semi-colon. :-P I don't like nor mean to nitpick, but the wrongful punctuation of the dialog is bothering as well. I think you should check those things up for the future because they're very basic stuff you'd just automatically assume everybody to have right. Most of all those that read and/or write a lot.

I could point out so many things I found especially appealing. Like the characterisation of James, and Grant, your clever and funny way with words, some puns and realisations, adorable scenes, the name of the 15th chapter, the awesome last chapter... :-D The memos to self very funny and I like how you didn't overdo Cheryl and Mandy, it's a slippery slope with such one-sided characters.

Bishop turned out to be a real douche after all those years, disappointing but I don't know what there is you could've changed in his character. Maybe some more insight to his thoughts as it was quite a dramatic change. Well it appears you may not have been active here in a while so I'm just letting you know I read it, liked it, (am wondering why it doesn't have hundreds of reviews) and will have to have a look at the sequal.

awesome!...lol the ending was great

ha that ending was classic didnt see it coming at all ! i was sitting here all aww no how crappy that they didnt get back together guess they all kind end happy but bam you got me it was great over all the whole story i read it from start to finish in one sitting yeh i have no life now im off to read the sequel !

holy cow i put this on word lmao and wel i was going to print this out and everything but uh...well...it was 306 pages long lmao and then well i shrunk it down and put it on landscape and its like now is 79 pages long lmao ITS CRAZY! U write too much keep it up lmao...it doesnt matter cause i print them off at my school ha ha...

I really liked this story. I tis a lot different than your other stories, but i like the playfulness of it. Great job!

You have no idea how happy i am with your story. there are so many writers who get caught up in trying to be witty and sarcastic and clever that they forget there's a story to write. but you just blend it in so well that i pretty much laughed the entire time. the things that come out of James' mouth are so hilarious. and the best part is that it doesn't take away from the story. the primary focus was still on the plot but the added bonus was her wit and sarcasm. it was gloriously brilliant!

very cute story!

i definitely like your style, it's different.

good job!

kool

Ohmygosh! I love this story. I tried searching the title on the search bar which is probably why the review quota is so low. You should have managed a few hundred. I just wanted to tell you that your characters have a lot of depth, although slightly 2D at some point.

And, i think you should allow anonmynous reviews, because that will increase them by a lot. Just go to log in. reviews. and you should know what to do. BTW, i love grant.

o...you scared me! at first i thought they didn't get together in the end, but then i re-read it and YAY!

loved the story! great job! )

BLAH I HATE the ending it's so boring I wish there was more to it then what there is. Other then that I really enjoyed the story it was cute yet witty and had me laughing at random moments.

Very well written, quite funny indeed but it seems far too rushed, so whatever, it was alright.

Fantastic ending to the story. It wrapped things up, but still left a bit to the reader's imagination.

I just want to say thank you for writing this, and it's been an amazing read.

Hope to see more from you in the future :)

Carm