This seems to be rather more straightforward than your other poems, and thus isn't as awesome. It's very predictable, and thus the rhymes end up seeming forced, because there's not much else to concentrate on. You're a wonderful writer, though, and this is written beautifully! I particularly enjoyed the third line of the first stanza- it seemed to have an originality that was rather lacking elsewhere.

-Yna, from the Review Marathon (see the link in my profile!)

i like the way this flows

and the descriptions you used were strong.

respects, -ty.

interesting idea.. making ghosts sad not scary and the incorporation of the idea of having sucky life but being alive was great.. i really really liked this piece

I really like this poem. There's something about it I can't explain.