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AK the Twilight 2007-08-27 . chapter 1
Outside of some spelling errors, this is a pretty nice poem. You do seem to follow some familiar metaphors and I must say that this isn't incredibly original. Don't get me wrong; this is a great read and has some really heartfelt moments, especially in the middle. Try to elaborate the imagery a bit more; don't just say the leaves are floating. What do they look like? Regardless, this was a great read. Very good job.
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