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| and-on anonymous 2008-04-08 ch 7, anon. | abuseAmnot logged, in but I haven'tread any stories for a while, just caught up with this one- I really think you should finish it. It's good- you capture her confusion really really well. Good job :) |
| LilionTheUrbanFairy 2007-09-28 ch 1,  | abuseI just found this today and I'm totally in love with this story it's really wonderful I love your narrative, (I love narrative stile with little if not any dialoge) its wonderful and very magical it's very rare read good narrative almost every one likes to relay in dialog but I like this much more!! |
| worstwriteronfic 2007-08-12 ch 1, | abuseOh...so this is just an experiment? No wonder there's no dialogues or any of those stuff. But its good. I love the characters .. I think they are very... sweet. And the fact that the story is discriptive too. Continue the good work. |
| worstwriteronfic 2007-08-08 ch 6, | abuseHow come there aren't any dialogues? It would be better. |
| Islandgyal2004 2007-08-07 ch 6, | abuseAll I can say is wow |
| justaguy 2007-04-27 ch 4, | abuseWhen do you have time to write? You have too much school work to do. LOL Get your work done. LOL Take care! |
| PrettyAwkward 2007-04-27 ch 4, | abuseGood chapter, they're both getting closer. Its good. Update soon. |
| And-on-Anonymous 2007-04-27 ch 4, | abuseGood to know- I'm going to Australia for a month in the summer doing some volunteer work and then some adventure stuff, and I can imagine getting into an awkward situation with the bathroom thing! I'm English and yeah, we would normally say toilet, but bathroom would be used as well. Yes, it was worth the wait! i like your style, it's sort of dream-like, slow and gradual; when things happen, because it's so dreamlike, it seems like the most natural thing in the world, so well done, because it makes ot more realistic. Can't wait to find out some more about Brian, she's such an enigma at the moment...why is she out on the streets?Does she live on the street permanently or just sometimes spend the night out there? where are her family? what kinds of things does she like? I like the way you capture the narrator's nervousness around her- it's good and quite sensual. Looking forard to the next chapter... |
| PrettyAwkward 2007-04-22 ch 3, | abuseIts a good story, pretty interesting. Can't wait to see what happens with them. I can't really see how old they are though. Well update soon. |
| And-on-Anonymous 2007-04-22 ch 3, | abuseCool- I'm glad you explained it, I was a bit shokced at first at its shortness, but I guess it makes sense...looking forward to the longer chapters though! I want to know what her favourite band is now... i'm intrigued. looking forward to the next update :) P.S Thanks for answering my review- it's nice to feel that the reviews are appreciated! |
| xiidizzy 2007-04-21 ch 3, | abuseLike And-on-Anonymous, I also enjoy the pacing of this story. Having one chapter for each seperate day makes it feel like I'm reading a story written through diary entries. It's pretty cool. :] Brian's kind of rude, calling at ridiculous hours just to laugh at Isabella. xD You weren't kidding when you said 'some short chapters' though. .__. Thanks for reviewing my review! :P I look forward to reading more. :) |
| And-on-Anonymous 2007-04-18 ch 2, | abuseNo! No flaming from me! Again, it looks like this story is going to be good, I like your style, I like the oace and I like the way you add subtle characterisation points the whole way through, i.e we find things out about the characters the whole way through- like the bit near the end where she reveals how sheltered she is through not having ever sen two women together, or even thought about it. Good! I look forward to the next chapter :) |
| xiidizzy 2007-04-17 ch 2, | abuseMore femmeslash! :D This site could always use more. I added this to story alert. Hope to see an update soon. :) There isn't much about the characters, though...just what they're doing. It's a little difficult to imagine their personalities when there's no dialogue, but I am interested to see how you will work that out later? [Placebo = lovelovelove. "This Picture" is my favorite by them. :3] |
| Islandgyal2004 2007-04-17 ch 1, | abuseUpdate soon |
| And-on-Anonymous 2007-04-17 ch 1, | abuseI like this start, I hope you definitely continue with it! You've got a good writing pace worked out here and i like the way you've created a sense of Isabella's confusion without stating it oh-so-directly. Well done :) |