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| Durandel 2007-06-21 ch 2,  | abuseGood chapter, really was pretty good. If you could write this well with writers block, I wonder how good your actual writing is. Though the preview was a bit questioning... I can't really see any problems, except that... why in the world would there be a Ninja? Kinda random, don't you think? I'm saying its wrong, its just that it came out of nowhere. |
| Ilze09 2007-05-26 ch 2, | abuseWow, I really do like this. It's very interesting and original concept, something that I love. I really loved the opening dialouge between the bartender and Nero, that was great. Keep writing, I loved it and keep reading my story, please. I'd love to get your opinions. |
| BriRy 2007-05-07 ch 2, | abusevery well written first couple of chapters. i especially enjoy the character Nero. Your dialouge, descriptions, and action scenes are very good, very intriguing. I'll be back to check out future chapters of your story. |
| Durandel 2007-05-02 ch 1, | abuseOkay... You probably don't remember me, but I was called Ragnarok Element's a long time ago. Lets just say that I left this site for a while, my ideas weren't good and I souldn't review anybody, so yeah here I am. Man, it is good to be back though, I hope we'll be able to work together later on Wish, but I haven't seen that man update from the others of Meteor. Enough about me, this story started out with a band, literally, it caught my attention and was short and sweet, good job. Next one here I come! |
| SirScott 2007-04-30 ch 2, | abuseGood effects to this story. It has the perfect style for noir. Hope your block is a small one. ~SirScott |
| drakkarim 2007-04-27 ch 1, | abuseHmm, this chapter is too short, and u need more details. also, use spellcheck to catch your grammar mistakes, since i caught some in that little snippet. For future reference, it's best to post a chapter, if it's at least 5 pages long in microsoft word. However, this story does have some potential. Keep working at this. Till next, DRAK |
| Kumquat21 2007-04-24 ch 1, | abuseAh! You have some very good writing in here. I like Nero! The one CC - lo~onger! It's not compact at all, the story (or what we know of it) flows beautifully, but it's too short. My reccomendation - write more! You have something going here, with a revenge coorperation. |
| The Burning Rose 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseSounds very interesting but isn't Samurai Fiction someone elses story/title |
| Atamagaokashii Ookami-chan 2007-04-19 ch 1, | abusevengenance incorporated. well that's certaintly an interesting business. n, i wanna read more! who's the guy... the chapter i wish was a little longer tho... continue soon!_!XD |
| SirScott 2007-04-19 ch 1, | abuseSounds like a good start to a good action story. Intresting idea to compose different stories in the same universe. ~SirScott |
| rust phoenix 2007-04-18 ch 1, | abuseThis looks really promising, great first chapter even if it's a bit short. The wording was very effective and powerful, and it should be interesting to watch the plot unfold. |