I love it. I think a lot of people will relate to this. I love how your portraying the idea of this poem and not sounding complicated. Well done.

Wow, I liked the conclusion; it wrapped it up, and provided imagery.

I disliked the 'UNIQUE!' thing, it was pretty sudden and out of sync with the rest. Unless you wanted it that way? Also, the rhyming scheme was pretty off at times; it didn't seem to follow a particular pattern at all.

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I overall really liked the poem. It was great.

However, I found it odd that just a few lines rhymed, then it went back to free verse. So yeah, I thought that was weird...

A line I had a little problem with is where you put "UNIQUE!" I thought it was a little distracting...

Other than those, yeah I really liked the poem overall.

~Azena

Sweet, really well written:
'The ground there is uneven, filled with
ruts to make you fall, take away your hope'
Sweet lines, really well thought up, keep writing!
~Lurid~

Er... I like your overall voice. The tone of it is insightful... Did you get inspiration from Robert Frost? Perhaps mocking what he once said about a "Road less Traveled?"

Ah, but when you turn around take a long look at how far you've traveled...the trials that you've over come...look at how much stronger you've become because you were brave enough to take the path less traveled...the narrow path.

Beautiful piece, Chaos. I did get a little chuckle at the last line...nice touch/play on words.

Scottie

Ha, I liked the pun in the last line. =)

loneliness and broken SOLES lol.. I like this..it's hard to be unique, isnt it?

Kali

Beautifully said, as always!

I am going to add it to my favs and to my C2!

Best Wishes!



*TSP