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| Raventail Blacktalon 2007-09-15 ch 1,  | abuseWoo! I loved that! What I like most is your writing style. Normally, I can't read a narative for more than two paragraphs, but the way you worded things and such really kept me hooked. I also liked the blend of cultures in this... more specifically, the blend of cultures with accurate information (Hel, Odin, Vahalla... for example). However, I did find three things that might need a fixin'. The plural form of kukri is kukri; since it's a Japanese word, and their plural forms don't have "s" on the end. Also, the "viking sword" that Egil used, as accurate as that was, well, it's actually called a Viking Sax - not a big deal, by all means, but just something I thought I'd point out. Er... the third... there was an error, somewhere... just a word that was out of place... I can't seem to find it back though. DX But yes, all in all, this has to be one of the BEST short stories I've ever read. EVER. I really, really enjoyed this. Hooray! |
| Aerodotus 2007-05-21 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is different... Answers the question "What would the wild west be like if the geopolitics of the early 11th century had been retained into the middle of the 19th century?" |