LOL! poor sixteenth! ahh, it's been so long! fp is like another world. anyway, whoho! i can't believe ur done already, u put me to shame! well done, you, really well done!

If I was a keeper of time I'd kill myself. love it. Read and review me please.

This is a really interesting chapter. I think I need to go back and reread what happened at the end of the last chapter though. I hate not having time for the things I like to do. But that's what happens when you go back to college after taking the summer off. Oh well. Good job!

This is so good right now, where you're at in this story. I'm falling asleep, so I'm going to go and get some. Sleep, that is. But great job! I love this story, really I do.

Wow! This was an amazing chapter! I had gotten a little busy and behind with this story...though, only by two chapters, within these last few days. But wow, this was really interesting and exciting, a good mix of action and plot. I liked it very much.

This. Is. Cool.
I love the idea of the Timekeeper...when i've read on a bit further, can i draw some fanart of Rame? Pwease?? I've got itchy fingers just reading this! *eye twitches towards pencil on desk* No. I must fight. I don't know what he looks like properly yet *fingers inch along desk...* I will stop the urge to draw...somehow...

I like this chapter a lot. I bet it was hard to come up with all that stuff about a Timekeepers powers and adding up everything. I can see how this would take you a long time to write. But now we're left wondering what Eleventh is up to. Ah well. I'll have to wait for it. Good job!

I love your story! Its absolutly fasinating! It would make a great novel. Terrific job!

Oh peculiar! I'm very intrigued at this other witch who is Myrne's enemy, and about the other timekeepers! I love hearing about them - they're so interesting! I think it'd be the cutest thing if Twentieth ended up crushing on Sixteenth. Teehee! But anyway, I will be waiting ever patiently for another update!

Hey I studied psychokinesis and stuff like that a long time ago! I dunno if it's still online, but if you need resources, try

Anyway, nice chapter - short, but nice. It's interesting to see this new Zion person, and I'm a little bit bummed that the Chosen didn't have much interaction in this chapter. I think I rather dislike Zion, too... :/

THIS IS BAD ONO! :O Bad bad Myrne! And I hate Torin! He's rude and MRHfft. I hope the three manage to get out of this mess okay. I sorta don't care about Shadow anymore. She's too shifty... I just care about Rame, Scheneu, and Kishe. *sniffle* Bad Myrne! I don't like where this is going!

I really liked the beginning. It was very well described, with Zion doing his thing. I was just wondering, though, wouldn't Shadow and Torin's reaction to him have been more severe? They thought he was dead for sure, right? But, that might just be me. I also wish that we'd gotten some of Rame, Kishe, and Scheneu's thoughts on this new character, and his group? I don't know if the group followed him, or if not. But they weren't really mentioned. I feel as though I'm being overly critical, seeing as I did like the chapter. I just...wanted more. Good job.

*Gasps* Zion is alive!?!?!? I don't know what this means, not really. But I want to know for sure! I like this chapter. And I didn't know you were so young! Your writing is really flipping good! If you were 20, I would still think your writing is at least flipping good. But yes, to cap that off, I like your writing. It's good. And I'll be around for the next chapter also.

Very fun chapter. I was too tired last night to read, my ADD would have been going off the walls. But, it's all very interesting. Don't you love it when good ideas come to you out of nowhere? I personally, love it. Yeah, so yay for all the action and plot. I'm interested to find out what you mean about how you're going to link everything together.

I LOVE Eleventh's style... I used to hate him, but now he's really growing on me, and I love the way he just so simply implants a though into someone's head, and then -BAM- complication! Love it!

And I hope we see more of Torin's personality. I want to know what he's like! :D ^^ This is getting exciting!