Hi, I found this through ‘Pay It Forward’, saw you did not have any reviews yet, and decided to help you out with that. You have an admirable voice, and a great deal of talent as a writer. With reference to your writing, you do extremely well in normal problem areas such as punctuation, grammar, and just overall style. This had great believable dialogue, and a writing style that seems to be uniquely yours. For that reason, constructive criticism on my part is quite limited. I just wanted to say thanks for the great read, and that it was refreshing one-shot--not that I'm a expert. I only have currently written one personally, but I think you wrapped up all your possible loose threads in a proper fashion. This was poignant, and unlike much of the fictionpress fare, the male protagonist had masculinity (a problem area for male for some other writers.