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| Dextera 2007-08-16 ch 1,  | abuseFrom "The voice of an iron cricket," and forth, it gave me chills. I absolutely adore your writing! Keep up the amazing work. |
| Manuel Fajar 2007-07-29 ch 1, | abuseAh, but the cricket does have a voice and sings well. Nicely done, very good read. m |
| Sercus Kaynine 2007-07-05 ch 1, | abuseTrue; I think many people have the makings of a revolution in them, and they're just too scared or clueless to realize it. This poem told me a story. One that I very much enjoyed. The ending part (after the last iron cricket) was my favorite, since I could totally relate. Anyway, keep writing! |
| substitute angel 2007-06-28 ch 1, | abuseWhat can I say? This is really really good as all your poems are. They show deepness of thought and skill. Not many writers can write poems that are filled with enough description as well as powerful words to create a poem as good as the ones you've written. I envy you. :) Keep writing. |
| InViSiBlE wOmAn 2007-06-27 ch 1, | abuseYour imagery is AH-MAZE-ING, this is an excellent peice of work and the first four lines are brilliant. Excellent! |
| Icicle Tears 2007-06-27 ch 1, | abuseThe imagery is a little fuzzy in this one, but I get the idea that it's supposed to be. But, I can connect completely to what you say about the iron cricket itself. I've found it within myself that I can rise above and speak out...but I don't know if my voice would work. I don't have the guts to do it. The connection here is beautiful, and I believe anyone can see it. |
| Sk8tR-BunnY 2007-05-14 ch 1, | abuseThis got me all sniffly dammit...! Its incredibly inspirational and graceful at the same time. But then again, all your work is like that~! ^.^ |
| Crepusculum 2007-05-13 ch 1, | abuseI like it. :) It gave me chills, the good kind, of course. I feel like this poem has it all - it's deep, it makes one think, it has great descriptions, it's original, and it's emotional, too. :) |
| mistressKC 2007-05-11 ch 1, | abusevery powerful message |
| The Jynx of Kari 2007-05-05 ch 1, | abuseAmazingly strong imagery [I dunno how to spell it. . .] I was blown away by it. __Kari |
| Inkypink 2007-04-30 ch 1, | abuseI've never heard anyone describe themselves as an iron cricket before :) It's a cool term...putting together something so small with something so strong and hard and unbending. Perfect title, sums up this whole poem really; and I like the idea you pout across, that if you are determined enough, no matter how small you are you can make yourself heard. |
| temporality 2007-04-26 ch 1, | abuseI adore the first four lines... and the rest of the poem, of course, but it would be useless to quote everything you wrote. But, don't end sentences in prepositions! ;) ~Cristina |
| Femme de Dieu 2007-04-25 ch 1, | abuseVery nice-- I did not find the second "branches" to be a problem, because you added the word "those" before it. You repeated many words that way-- sometimes repetition is a good thing in a poem such as this that is supposed to have that determined edge to it, such as your title suggests. Good ending-- leaving one to wonder... Most truly, L. |
| Abysmal Tr3pidation 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is amzing and very descriptive. I really loved the "Rocks… or pebbles?" question... Keep writing. ~**~Indiana~**~ |
| Samana 2007-04-20 ch 1, | abuseawesome. i like it a lot. one clinker though "When the wind would blow ** the branches And rip the leaves from their stems on those branches" the repeated "branches" kinda stopped the flow right there. but other than it. i like it |