|Reviews for Breaking The Mirror|
| zann3n 5/19/11 . chapter 32
You know, I'm not even sure if you come on this site anymore.
I'm thinking you don't.
I don't care though, because I've felt the need to say this to you, ever since the first time I've read this story.
Your writing just conveys so much fucking emotion, that it literally makes me feel like I'm the main character. I understand completely. Your level of insight into the mind of someone with such a tragic past as this astounds me.
I'm hoping though, that whatever you're doing now, or wherever you are, you didn't give up writing. You're so fucking inspiring. Incredibly so.
I never thought that someone such as myself could have a chance at something as freeing as this, and yet, reading this has given me hope for a better ending.
So I guess, what I'm aiming at here, is something along the lines of thank you.
Thank you so fucking much for writing this.
| April R. Jones 5/7/11 . chapter 32
This was beautiful. It had me in tears at so many parts and I found myself crying at the finale. This gem I uncovered through the search feature is truly magnificent. The way you portrayed everything was done in a realistic, relate-able manner.
Jayden's character development was something I thoroughly enjoyed seeing throughout his story. The way he thought and felt about the abuse (both the sexual and physical abuse) was both realistic and very innocent at the same time. You were able to tell that from the longing of Charlie's touch still so late on in the story shows that the corrupted innocence still lurks inside of Jayden as much as he wants to break from it.
His reaction to his father's abuse however is very different. The way he allows his father to beat him shows that he's been defeated by his father in more ways than one and yet, when others still want to help him, he continues to defend Alfred. Again, it shows the childlike innocence inside Jayden how he still reaches out to protect and hide the truth from everyone - which is a key point when writing about abuse.
His character was kept in character throughout this story, and I liked that. There was no 'sudden changes' in himself and even when he began living with Seanton and gradually began to lead a better and happier life, his character was still kept 'in' character.
There was no overuse of characters in the story too, which kept the story easier to follow and each character was developed very well and each different character had obviously had a lot of thought put into them.
There were, as you stated many times, a few spelling and grammatical errors throughout the story, but hey - who doesn't make a few errors here or there? It wasn't bad to the point where I felt like it ruined the story (and trust me, I'm very picky about grammar and spelling etc etc). I honestly couldn't stop reading it once I started. The story was breathtaking.
I think I agree with you on ending Jayden's story here. I think a lot of people were expecting more out of it, but I could feel it too that this is where Jayden would have wanted it to end. He'd finally broken free of his abuse, found out the true contents of his mothers death, had his birthday, which in a way symbolizes that a new beginning for him, and then he finally had the one he loved finally open up and return his feelings for him. As he said - he truly is the luckiest guy in the world.
That's another thing I love, Seanton and Jayden's relationship. It wasn't too heavily focused on throughout the story and didn't completely dominate the plot. It was there, you could see it, and there was just the right amount of it. I'll admit, my inner slash fangirl was rooting and hoping for a bit of 'fun time' between the two, but the other part of me knew that Jayden probably needed more time to recover before that would happen.
I can't express how much I love this story. I've recommended it to a lot of my friends who are interested in sob stories with slash in it and the one whose fully completed it agreed with me this was truly an outstanding, amazing piece of fiction. If this was ever published as a book, I'd still buy it, despite having already read it. Just so I could flaunt to my friends about how I have one of the most amazing pieces of fiction I've ever read sitting on my bookshelf.
I hope to see a sequel of this - if you don't write a sequel, I can understand completely. Where it ended was perfect - but I'd like to see where Seanton and Jayden finally end up together with each other. I feel like that was one of the things that felt incomplete to me.
Best wishes in your future works.
| Rose 5/3/11 . chapter 32
I love this story and have read several others you have written and enjoyed them as well. While there are several other details I would have liked to hear about and reations that I think could have been interesting, I understand ending it here. I don't think it was the best ending, but it was complete enough to satisfy. I hope you continue writing.
| Wolf-in-sheep-clothing 4/24/11 . chapter 32
Oh, I love this story I read all night until eight o'clock in the morning. The moment I started reading I just couldn't stop. *Tears up* That was a great ending it seriously wouldn't have made sense to continue it from that point. This was about how he fell in love with Seaton and got away from his father and away from Charlie blah the name even sounds creepy to me now.
| Kerrigas 4/23/11 . chapter 32
Holy fudge this was amazing! Angsty but cute as all hell, and it sent a ridiculous amount of shivers down my spine.
The ending was cute, but somehow I was expecting... more... Eh well, I have my imagination w
| Wolf-in-sheep-clothing 4/23/11 . chapter 14
opps sorry didn't mean to put this on story alert *sweat drop*
| Priscylla 4/14/11 . chapter 31
Wow, I read the whole story in one go... I love it and the ending did not disappoint.
I guess the titel "Breaking the Mirror" makes sense, after the last chapter. It's a good end, not to much and everything. But you COULD always write an epilogue, if not a sequel. Then you wouldn't have trouble with some disjointed time skips ;) Anyway, this story was really great and I would love to read some more from you!
My favorite line from the last chapter:
"You have some nerve giving me this letter, brat."
Then I just knew that there was hope for the two of them :)
| Disney Is Hardcore 4/7/11 . chapter 3
If you want I'll beta this for you? (though I have like no experience..)
| Disney Is Hardcore 4/6/11 . chapter 32
That story was actually amazing. Like, flawless. (except for the typos) but it was soo good.. And I have to get up in 6 hours and I fully blame you for writing something so un-put-down-able, but I forgive you.
Yeah, thanks for that story :)
| Feed Meh Bacon 3/30/11 . chapter 32
This story was really intense. Yup. But it was good, although I'm sad at the ending and just that the story ended (and yes, I shall admit it, no sex. D:) But still it was a story worth reading :) I sincerely hope you continue in a sequel :D
| foreverandeverr 3/15/11 . chapter 31
| MerieLiss 3/8/11 . chapter 31
It was the perfect ending eve tho I'm pretty sure we all want to take a peek at their future, I think it was perfect
| RandomReviewer 3/5/11 . chapter 32
omg, i enjoyed this story so much! by the way, if you liked this story, read bird's eye view by: the clayer.
| Given up 2/15/11 . chapter 7
I've loved what I've read so far. I really have. Unfortunately, the sheer amount of spelling errors has gotten to a point where I can't ignore it anymore. Now, I simply expect the words to be spelled incorrectly. Please go through your story and fix them. It's a shame that such a good story has to be ruined by something so easily preventable.
| Whotevar 2/7/11 . chapter 32
Really enjoyed this, thank you so much for sharing your writing. The end didn't feel cut off at all, I thought it made perfect sence and ended nicely even if it wasn't originally planned :) at any rate, fun story.