I like that you use French in the story. Very cool. That sucks about Gabriella's step-father beating her though.

David amuses me and you have really cool names for the seekers.

If I was a character in this story, I would be either an angel, Untrained, or Seer. Cool story. Mace is officially my favorite character.

Well, well, well. That's a nice twist. I liked this chapter as well. I'm slightly repetitive, yay me. More characters, which is always good. Well done.

I like this story so far. The plot seems very well thought out, and Gabriella seems like a strong character. Good work so far. :D

Yay! I've finally had a moment to sit down and read some of your stuff! Gosh, I've had this on my "to review" list for friggin ever...

Anyway, I like the fact that Gabriella is blind and just basically not the typical heroine; but she still comes across as very strong and capable. The world in your story is full of fun characters. I enjoyed how non-chalant Mace is when telling Gabriella that she should be terrified of him.

The scar is an intriguing mystery; I'm just as curious about how he got it as Gabriella is.

Just saying objectively, does Gaby really have a fascination with drakness. At the end, she throws her hands up in the air and says that she doesn't want anything to do with it all.

Jane Austin would kill you for saying that peace is a boring thing. Domestic drama was what she thrived on. And I love the ending in which she drops everything. It is a very different message then the fight for what is right thing that most heroes have going on. And lastly, I liked that Gaby told her that you just have to try with your heart, that she didn't have to be perfect- just sincere. I think this was the best chapter.

Hmm. Okay, better character development for a girl who isn't big on detail. And the little extra explanation did wonders.

This is one of your more hectic peices. However, I'm glad to see that Gaby wasn't your patent character. Everything didn't revolve around her.

Good one. It was a bit rushed, but the point was still clear. I think.

It seems like you were watching Charmed during this episode. I like that she is blind and unafraid.

I am continuously intrigued by your writing style. So Gabriella has no fear of the magical community because she is blind. Continue writing.

I was slightly confused at first, but it all turned out really nicely at the end. The web of people, Gabriella, Walker, Chase, Mace, Dr. Sanders, Caderyn, Savannah, Edward, etc., the way everyone related to each other had me mixed up for about fifteen minutes, and then I figured it out. Very good plot, and . . . yeah, it's a really cool story! Keep on writing, I think you've got a gift for it.

Hm...a bit disorganized, but a very interesting story indeed. Ah yes, I did love the twist.

Keep writing!

Hmm...nice start. You tend to use too many speaking verbs (i.e. said, announced, asked) though. You don't need one every time someone speaks.

Keep writing.