Okay, just a few things. I like a good mystery - I'm trying to get into writing them myself, so I know how hard a good one is to pull off. That said, I don't think this one really did pull it off. Too much guesswork on the part of the sleuth.

I mean, I first really saw it when he was thinking about the person's pick of poison. There were really no good reasons for him to come to the conclusions he did - and rule number one of mystery stories - your sleuth will base his conclusions on solid fact - not magic, or hunches, or womanly intuition. But concerning the issue at hand: A bomb would be hard for a single person to pull off, but not impossible, and the timing of the warning has nothing to do with the preparation of the threat - A person may call in a bomb threat for weeks, but if they really are meaning to do something about it, they may _never_ punch in a threat.

After that, things got a little hazy. But your sleuth said best what my problem was with this story:

"I took my chances."

That said, this had potential to be a very very good HS mystery. Personally, I like my HS with a bit of Noir, and if you could have worked some Brick-esque dialogue and scenes in, this would have been a favorite. Still, nice work, and good luck in future endeavors.

I was a little confused up 'till the ending, but then I got it.

And I liked the last line, too. :)

Nice story. Keep writing!
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great story. It kept me on the edge of my seat. I was in school reading this, the paranoia of someone actually pulling that off made the experience of reading the story even better.

wonderful ending! please make a squeal!
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Someone is in major trouble...

Can't think of anything else to say...

Update soon!

isn't he ever going to get in trouble for all this? please kepp on writing!
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Is what vince was planning? it can't be! keep on updating!
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Vince's thought process left me with nearly a thousand different predictions...

Uh, that's all I can think of for now, later!

interrseting, very suspenseful.
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And here we have many different ways to pickpocket people.
Uh... yay?

I actually enjoy reading about them. I've learned quite a few (but I've never used them, honestly!). One of the most memorable ones was in a book I read. I think it was called "bump and lift". The thief would "accidentally" bump into the victim and snatch something while both were regaining balance, or something like that. It was a while ago.

Right, back to the plot. We're getting somewhere! I don't really have any predictions right now...

Update soon!

New characters, new plot (maybe...?), new story? Let's see where it goes.

I read on your profile this guy is supposed to be a thief. I'm a fan of thief stories, personally, so I should find this interesting.

And I've had that problem with the support site at FictionPress and FanFiction at least three times. Thanks for the tip on exporting chapters and reusing them. It never crossed my mind.

Yeah... The problem should go away after a while. The longest it's lasted for me is about 3-4 days.

Uh... later.