This is lovely. It looks like it could either stop right here or go somewhere else. Which do you have in mind? I like this guy, bitterness and all.

Hahaha I absolutely love the first part. It's hillarious. I can truly imagine it and the dialogue (monologue rather...) brought a smile to my troll face. I love the expressions used, they're original and yet serve their purpose. They're rather funny too. I think the first and last part are neatly wrapped together and the story fulfills it's purpose. Good work!

Wow. That was an incredible story. The last part made me want to cry. I loved the Eleanor Rigby quotes.

I liked it! I think it was very original the scene with the unfaithful woman, Evan's attitude, and I liked the rest of it too :) cheers!